Talk:Dave Martinez/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: EricEnfermero (talk · contribs) 12:49, 4 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'm happy to begin reviewing this in the next few days. EricEnfermero (Talk) 12:49, 4 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

After an initial readthrough, this looks good and I think it will be a straightforward review. The article seems robustly sourced and there are no apparent copyvios.

Early life[edit]

Would it be better to mention his parents' nationality here rather than in Personal Life? No big deal, but the first para of this section is a little thin anyway.
- Yeah, that makes sense. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:35, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
We have three sentences in a row with "___________'s baseball team". I would try to phrase one of those differently.
- Well, it's two out of three sentences that have that phrasing, so yes, I've reworded that paragraph. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:35, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Professional career[edit]

Martinez was the 1985 Carolina League batting leader (by a landslide). He had a pretty rapid rise from Class A to MLB, so that might help to put it in context.
- That's impressive, I did not know that. I'm adding it now. – Muboshgu (talk) 15:35, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
There are a few seasons that aren't really covered in the body. I would try to give at least some stats for each season. He had a pretty good '87 season, hitting .292. His average did fall in 1988, but I would clarify that it was only to .255. 1993 and 1994 particularly stick out to me. He did get injured and get released, but I would mention stats because he played >90 games in each of those seasons.
- I've added 1987, and will look into those others. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Fifth paragraph: "but saw an increase in playing time when he was replaced by Terry Bevington" - change to "when Lamont was replaced..."
- Sentence reworded – Muboshgu (talk) 20:37, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"In addition to signing in Florida, he was enticed by the Rays' additions" - does this mean he was attracted to playing in the state of Florida?
- Yes, as he resides there. i clarified that. – Muboshgu (talk) 20:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
The next sentence: "first hit" - change to "the first hit".
- Done – Muboshgu (talk) 20:37, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"First and only time" - change to "only time"
- Done – Muboshgu (talk) 20:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Coaching career[edit]

Change his Rays coaching responsibilities to past tense.
- Done – Muboshgu (talk) 20:36, 9 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

We should be able to pass this once we address this feedback. Thanks for your work on this. It's always great to see a GA nom for a player who has had a long career in baseball but who isn't thought of as a perennial All-Star or a Hall of Famer. EricEnfermero (Talk) 05:15, 7 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

I nearly forgot to come back to this, but I am passing it. I am going to add a couple of season stat lines, but the article is not really missing any major aspects and the nominator did a great job of addressing the feedback.

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
No images to worry about; as he is an active coach, maybe someone will get one this season.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Nice work! EricEnfermero (Talk) 02:47, 23 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I was about to come back to finish this off, but I'm sure I can still find ways to improve it. – Muboshgu (talk) 14:16, 24 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]